Redundancy in writing occurs when a writer says the exact same thing twice and repeats herself.
While there are elegant uses of repetition, repetition that clarifies a point, repetition that emphasizes a point, and repetition that adds rhythm and euphony to a sentence, more often than not, repetition is used mistakenly to say the same thing again and again repetitively.
For instance, I try to go to sleep by twelve midnight and I like to eat my midday luncheon at twelve noon. In the morning, I’ve been writing the history of the life of Ellen Wasserman; in the afternoon, I take my young puppy for a walk by circling around the field.
One could say that circling around is one and the same. Personally, I think I would agree and have a consensus of opinion, but the purpose of this post is to demonstrate and show my readers how tiresome and tedious it is to reading something again and again, twice.
Samuel Johnson advised writers to “avoid ponderous ponderosity.” Here’s how:
- Avoid wordy phrases, like the ones I used above: Personally, I think I would agree and history of the life of (biography). Other examples are as far as I’m concerned, because of the fact that, have a tendency to, and such phrases people use to beef up their word count – and put their readers to sleep.
- Avoid the obvious. Examples from above include young puppy (is there any other kind?), twelve midnight and twelve noon (midnight, noon), midday luncheon and circle around. Other examples include cooperate together, personal opinion, free gift, new innovations and my favorite: past history.
- Avoid pairing synonyms (even though many people do): exact same, each and every, one and the same, longer in length, actual fact, again and again.
Deborah Lee Luskin an award-winning author, a radio commentator, and an educator who has been teaching writing for nearly thirty years.
Mema says
This is an excellent article. I know I am guilty of at least half of these more because I’m used to writing like I speak. It opens up so many grammatical faus pas as I look for the method that will make my writing sound more interesting or fresh but you’ve shown through these great examples how tiresome it is to read! The other day, I was reading a transcript of a lecture and the person kept verbally repeating whole phrases or using questionable sentence structure because (again) he was speaking and writing at the same time. It ruins the flow and makes the reader bored. I’ll use these tips to get better…thanks!
Deborah Lee Luskin says
Glad you found this helpful. Thanks for reading the blog – DLL
carinaofdevon says
This made me smile. I’m a university lecturer and I teach study skills to my first year Geography students. The theme of last week’s tutorials was ‘Effective Writing’, where I emphasised the need for brevity. I tried to convince my students that if they got rid of the redundant words, they could squeeze so much more value out of their limited word counts. ‘Think of what you could do with 1500 words, if you didn’t use circumlocution and tautology and repetition’, I told them. Some of them looked at me strangely. I had explained those words, so that wasn’t the problem. Then it clicked. They write in circles going round and round saying the same thing over and over before their twelve noon essay deadlines because they’re making up for a lack of research and work. For my students redundancy is the padding they need to write to the word count. And here I am, academic writer, blogger, creative fiction writer, wannabe novel writer, striving for brevity and purity and the elimination of all those unnecessary words that find their way into too many of my sentences. I have to remind myself that I was a student once too!
Deborah Lee Luskin says
1,500 words! Give them 500 so they can’t afford to be redundant! And keep up the good work teaching people to write clearly! All best, DLL
setyourpathsstraight says
Thanks for this. Excellent suggestions.
Deborah Lee Luskin says
You’re welcome. Thanks for reading the blog – DLL
lindsaycummingswrites says
How true this is. I have been scanning for these recently. It does not add anything to a story. Rather, it seems to dilute it. Great article, thanks for posting.
ambraha says
I love this. It’s true, and it is one of my biggest hates.
Kylie Betzner says
Great article! Those seem like very basic things, but I catch myself being redundant all the time! I wish I had a classroom to share this with because I used to see this in my students’ writing all of the time.
Deborah Lee Luskin says
Thanks for reading the blog – and for taking the time to comment. All best,
DLL
John S says
hilarious. each and every point was made and demonstrated perfectly. 😉
Deborah Lee Luskin says
You got it! Thanks for reading the blog. DLL
Jeremy Podolski says
If you have to say it twice, your words weren’t effective enough the first time. Great post.
Deborah Lee Luskin says
Exactly! Thanks.
kateywrites says
Great article – sometimes when we try to fill the page, we forget to make our point succinct. Though I clearly watch too much kid’s TV because what immediately comes to mind is the awesome PBS kids’ show WordGirl, in which one of the villains is Lady Redundant Woman. She works in a copy shop and has an evil copy of herself named Dupie.
Deborah Lee Luskin says
My kids are all grown up, so I didn’t know about this show. Sounds great; I’ll have to watch it!
Thanks for your comments, DLL
Eden says
So helpful! Thanks!
Deborah Lee Luskin says
Thanks for reading and commenting. Glad you found this helpful. DLL
shalilah2002 says
I get your point. I hate when I come across an article is too wordy, repeating oneself or taking forever to get to the point. I usually skip it,
Deborah Lee Luskin says
The novelist Elmore Leonard said he tried to leave out all the parts people just skip. There’s something to do that!
heatherbcosta says
An excellent post that reminds all of us that a lot of the time less is more!
Heather xxx
brandoninthevoid says
I have to say I actually loved the first two paragraphs. The 3rd was still entertaining but by the fourth I caught myself skimming. Thanks for the reminder!
Christ Followers says
Wow I break every one of those rules! Thx for the tips.
Book Club Mom says
These are great points – each and every one! I’m sure I make these mistakes a lot. Thanks for showing how to break this habit.
kennethkennethallisonallison says
Reblogged this on kennysgarden and commented:
excellent article I’m guilty too.
awhitlow2 says
This is so helpful! Thank you, and I am definitely guilty of all of these.